writing with Mrs earl

hello bloggers, this week for our writing our school's amazing principal Mrs Earl came into our class to give us an idea for our writing this week. we focused on collecting words,  collecting words is when you hear a word in a story or someone's writing that you like and you use that word in your writing. we made a vocabulary valut with all of them. We had to use a Adverbial phrase, repetition and a rhetorical question, we also used a shade o meter that is to make words better. We had a choice of using a photo or we could continue our writing from last week. I chose to continue my writing. here is my work for this week.

                                 The world of the future 
On one dark cold evening, Emily and Charlotte were eating their dinner as they heard a huge exploding noise. It was Ravana making robots for her brand new world of the future, she wanted things to change she wanted, everything to be new and modernized, except she lived in a dark black castle with her crazy bird Hebrew, so nowone would know where she lived. Emily hated her, but Charlotte loved robotics and she thought that Ravana was so cool and she wanted to be just as good as her someday. Emily bit her lip as she was frightened by the daunting sound.

As the dawn awakened, Emily took the bus to the local coffee shop as she turned around she observed the bus driver. She saw a shiny grey bolt in the driver's neck. She desperately wanted to know what was going on. If only her sister were there. If only she knew what was going on. If only she was still at home with her family. She quickly jumped off the bus to go get her sister. She noticed that loads of things were now replaced with robots and they were all going crazy, she just knew that ravana had something to do with it. How is she going to fix this predicament all by herself?

Emily darted down to her house to get Charlotte. Charlotte quickly made a mixture with loads of chemicals somehow, the girls raced down to the city and they threw the toxic mixture all over the robots, they automatically froze and fell to the ground. They got a huge dump truck to take the robots away. They had saved their city from getting badly hurt. Loads of children were inspired and they wanted to be heroes so Emily and Charlotte decided to make a wonderful park made out of all the scraps from the robots that had been dumped in a big construction site. All the kids helped and they felt like superheroes and in the end they had a wonderful park left. 

Thanks for reading my writing for this week      
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